Thursday, May 8, 2014

Writer's Workshop: How Lying Makes You a Better Writer



Stephen Colbert probably didn't know it at the time he coined the word in 2005, but TRUTHINESS is what fiction authors live, breathe, and bleed onto every page we write. Without our verisimilitude, the worlds and characters we create wouldn't be believable.

Verisimilitude, you say?

Now I bet you are all thinking that the above word is a little too long and not at all useful, especially in everyday talk. I recently attended a writing conference that had a class entitled Verisimilitude. I tried to avoid attending the class, but accidentally walked into the wrong room and felt awkward leaving, so I just stuck around. Boy was I glad I gave it a chance. Deren Hansen was the genius teacher leading the class.

So what is verisimilitude and how can it help you become a better writer? First off, let's do a little defining here:


So truthiness and verisimilitude are one and the same. They are the poker face. And in writing, they make us all liars. Writing fiction is just a step removed from lying. Now that you know that truth, how can being a LIAR-LIAR-PANTS-ON-FIRE make you a better writer?

First of all, you have to realize that in every novel you write, you are essentially acting as an illusionist. I recently read Carter Beats the Devil by Glen David Gold. In this fabulous book, Carter the Great is able to convince the audience of his magic through his skills as an illusionist. Many of his great tricks required months of planning and building contraptions that mimicked a reality for the audience. Everything in his act had a purpose from the way he dressed or flicked his wrist to his beautiful assistants--everything perfectly orchestrated to draw the audience's attention. The audience would watch his shows and really believe in his magic. The funny thing is that most of the magic really happened in their heads. In essence, Carter was the greatest verisimilutudist of his time (or maybe I should say that Gold is?).



Stories, like the best lies, are based on truth. As a writer, we need to come up with a Truth Center to make our lie effective. Just like an illusionist, we have to plan our world and our characters. Do wands create magic? Does John love ice cream? Do the two moons of Elga rise at dinner each night? Answering these questions will make our Truth Center. As our story unfolds, we must stick to the rules we have created in our Truth Center.

Does that mean that we have to tell every detail? No, we just select the interesting and cut out the boring stuff. Let the readers fill in the rest. Howard Tayler (Schlock Mercenary) has said, "The monster you imagine when I say something goes bump in the dark is far scarier than anything I could describe." Less is always more.

What we can do to increase verisimilitude:

  1. Postpone reader gratification
  2. Defy their expectations
  3. Show counter-intuitive effects
  4. Establish characters capable of heroism and cowardice, making it harder to predict what they will do
  5. Establish a pattern and then break it. This causes as much tension for the reader as it does for the characters
  6. Readers, like fish, need to be coaxed to the climax with cycles of tension and release. Reader worry powers the story engine.
We all love roller coasters (most of us, anyway) because we know they are carefully engineered to bring us back to the gate. A story, like a roller coaster, follows the same path, but readers want to feel as though anything in the context of the narrative is possible. We don't want to be told exactly where we are going, we want to experience the ride. To do that, we have to follow the Rules of 2:
  1. Every non-trivial element should be brought to the reader's attention at least twice
  2. Every character should have the potential and opportunity to make at least two choices.
Make what you are writing appear easy. It is hard to have verisimilitude if the writing is poor. Good writing, like the experienced ballerina who split leaps high in the air, should appear effortless and invisible. Hansen says the best way we can do this is by using competent wordsmithing.


Some other wordsmithing tips:
  1. Stick with simple forms of speech tags - he said, she asked. They shouldn't distract attention from the dialogue.
  2. Adverbs should only be used in speech tags to modify the act of speaking ('said loudly', NOT 'said spitefully')
Make sure your numbers add up too. Someone is going to check your facts. Anytime there are critical details, make sure you are accurate. I recently went to a book launch where author Brodi Ashton was talking about her book, Everneath. Apparently she had the distance between Park City and another city wrong in her book. She hates it when people bring it up. Obviously it hasn't ruined the success of her book, but those readers that notice it are taken out of the story for a minute or two because that verisimilitude wall broke down. Author is the root of the word "authority". As an author, you are saying you are the authority on what you have written. Make it so (as Jean Luc Picard would say).

AUTHORITY

Readers need to believe you know what you are doing. You don't need to be an expert, but you need to do you homework. You don't have to write just what you know. You DO have to know what you write. What do you do if you don't know the details? Don't cover up the scandal. Acknowledge it and move on so that the reader doesn't think you made a mistake.

At the end of the day, remember that truthiness can be hardwork. Perception is everything. Now get out there and start lying, author! If someone catches you in a lie, just tell them you are working.







Thursday, March 6, 2014

SHOWING vs. TELLING… Let's get specific

Every writer knows saying, "Show, don't tell." It's drilled into us so often that it becomes a mantra, spinning around in our heads. But even though we know the saying, it doesn't mean we understand how to apply it to our writing. Sarah Anderson had a great way to visualize it. 

TELLING is the equivalent of viewing the code from The Matrix.


Lots of information, but it keeps the reader at a distance. It doesn't make them feel like they are INSIDE, riding the waves of emotion, seeing the differences between what's real and what's not.

SHOWING is equivalent of making the reader feel like they are the one inside, 
dodging the bullets with Keanu. 

The same information is presented, but in a way that it's tangible and emotional to the reader. 

The reason showing is so much more compelling than telling is showing is all about emotion. When you show us a scene it allows the reader to be very present in what's happening, which will evoke emotion. In my opinion, EMOTION is what writing and reading are all about. All you have to do to write a good book is to make your reader feel something. Give them something to care about, someone to champion, hope to believe in and something to fight for, and you can't go wrong. 

Another aspect that goes along with showing versus telling is pacing. You need to make sure that you're showing the right scenes. You have to know when to give information at a more pulled back angle and when to slow it down and focus on it. If you're showing us things that aren't contributing to effective pacing, you're going to lose your audience. 

An easy way to SHOW instead of tell is to… BE SPECIFIC. Being specific with your details will automatically draw your readers in and make your writing more compelling. 


Here's an example: 

She got on the plane to fly from Virginia to Los Angeles. Kathy was scared during the take off. She was  also worried about what Jim would say when she showed up at his door after their fight. 

Ok you know something interesting is going on, but it's masked by the way it's written. Let's try again.
    
     "This is the flight to L.A., right?" Kathy asked the man in front of her. 
     He slung his backpack onto his shoulder and nodded. "Yes, ma'am."
    "Just checking," she said and dug through her bag to find the ticket for her seat assignment. "I never fly."
 Then man nodded in a polite but uninterested way and shuffled further ahead. Kathy boarded the plane, her shirt still sticking to her from the stress of the security line. She found her seat, got situated and picked at a hangnail while the stewardess went over the safely information.
     The engine roared to life and and Kathy scrunched her eyes shut and pushed her head into the safety of the headrest. Her stomach lurched along with the plane's ascent, a single thought overriding all others: What would Jim think when she showed up at his door? In the eight months they'd been wading through the long-distance relationship, she never thought he would cheat.

See the difference? The second example is much more compelling because you feel like you're going through it with Kathy and her stress is tangible.


Here are a couple of red flags to help you spot TELLING in your work:
  • Naming an emotion- When you tell the reader that your character is angry, the emotion is immediately limited to whatever your reader thinks of when they are angry. Maybe what you're trying to convey is a little bit of anger, a little bit of frustration, and a dash of shame. Well, you're never going to get all that out of saying "He was angry." You need to express it through words, through the character's body language, through their expressions, through what they're not saying.
"He clenched his jaw and ran a shaky hand through his hair. The way she'd looked at him made the secret burn inside him, threatening to break his resolve. He pounded a fist into the wall, ignoring the sharp bite across his knuckles."

Instead of just saying he's angry, now you can FEEL it along with him.
  • Passive Voice- The subject of the sentence is being acted upon instead of doing the action.
"The umbrella was opened by Mark."

Better option: "Mark opened the umbrella.

Look for was + verb (or verbs with -ing endings) in your manuscript as a quick way to identify possible passive voice. Try to use more interesting verbs. 

"The park was empty."
       
Better option: "The park stood empty."

Try not to begin a sentence with "there are," or "there was."

"There are lots of restaurants on the street."

Better option: "Restaurants lined the street."

Use past tense instead of past progressive. 
"She was listening."
      
Better option: "She listened."

Imbed the description of something in an adjective before the noun.

"The soccer field was brand new."
      
Better option: "The brand new soccer field."
  • Weak Verbs Avoid weak verbs. You can do a search and find in your manuscript to see if you have too many in your manuscript. Here's a few examples:
          was, sat, saw, ran, looked, put, set, thought, met, kept, got 

Make sure if you use these verbs, that you're doing it with intention.
  • Adverbs - Adverbs cheapen your writing and can be omitted in most instances for a stronger phrase. Adverbs modify, telling where, why or under what conditions something happens. They often end in -ly so you can do a search and find in your manuscript as a starting ground to identify them.
By replacing adverbs with a stronger verb, your writing will be much more compelling. 

"He left quickly."
Better option: "He stormed out."

"He wrote furiously on the page."
Better option: "He scrawled on the page."

Writing this way will take some getting used to. It's tough at first, but with some practice it will save you a lot of editing in the end. As someone who has done A LOT of rewriting and editing … trust me that it's better to learn these rules up front. 

I hope these tricks and tips give you a good foundation so that when they say show instead of tell, you not only understand why, but you know how to do it.

Good luck and happy writing!! 


(Today's post was contributed by Brooke Hargett)

Thursday, February 6, 2014

First Draft Done. Now What?



Ok, so you've made it to the end of your book. Congrats. You have made it farther than many a person will ever go. Now you can start sending it off to agents and publishers, right?


Um.......no.

Now that you've finished your FIRST DRAFT, it's time to continue onto the next draft and the next, until it is as perfect as it can get.

I'm no expert on revising (I'm working on RE-revising my first novel and on my third draft of my second), but I have found some helpful tips online:

Tips for Revising Your Manuscript - "Practice doesn't make perfect. Perfect practice makes perfect."

Writers Digest gives 6 tips to get started:
1.) The Cool-down Phase - let your book sit for a week or more before tackling the revision.
2.) The Prep Phase - create a cover and critic's blurb.
3.) Print out and Prepare a Fresh Copy
4.) Get Ready to Read - find your favorite spot to read.
5.) Read - curl up on your couch and read it (with little or no editing), preferably in as little sessions as possible.
6.) Analyze - after the first read through, begin to make notes.

I also have read some good things about this book:
Write Great Fiction: Revision & Self-Editing by James Scott Bell

Now print off that first draft and get to work. You've conquered a huge milestone, now let's polish it and make it shine so that you can present a diamond to a publisher.



Wednesday, June 26, 2013

The making of the Pop Tart

In preparation for tomorrow's 2nd Annual Bootcamp (YAY US!) I thought it would be fun to see the writing process of the one, the only, Jerry Seinfeld.... Enjoy!


We are also VERY excited to have YA author Elana Johnson coming to talk with us about Query Letters and Blogging! You can see Elena's popular blog HERE and get some help with your Query Letter on her Query Tracker Blog.

Can't wait for TOMORROW!!

Brooke

Wednesday, April 17, 2013

Stakes, Pitching & Conflict- A Mash-Up Tip



Post contributed by Brooke Hargett

Top two reasons this agent passes on sample pages - 

http://nelsonagency.com/top-2-reasons-why-i-pass-on-sample-pages/

Her suggestions prompted a good idea of an activity for our annual boot camp.


How to pitch to an agent:

I have a pitch coming up in a month so I've been researching this a lot!

On CONFLICT:  Really got me thinking….  In particular, the comments about how question and answer dialogue doesn't work really stuck with me.  Check it out: 


That's it for now!  Happy writing!
Brooke

Thursday, February 7, 2013

How to Revise a Novel

I found this great info on how to edit your book in four steps here. The just of the article states that we can do our revising by:

1. The Close-In Writing: Write a day's worth of work. Next day, before writing anything new, revise and edit the previous day.
2. The Close-In Edit: Finish draft 1. Read and revise from beginning. This gives you draft 2.
3. The Distance (or “Hand”) Edit: Print and hand write your edits. Afterward, fix it all on computer to get draft 3.
4. The Oral Edit: Print and read entire 3rd draft aloud, making notes

Ok, that's all fine and dandy. Now what things should you look for when revising:
NITPICKY STUFF (check out this NaNoWriMo article)


  • Omit all unnecessary words.
  • Sacrifice modifiers.
  • Consider the rhythm.
  • Replace "to be" and "to have." (the dreaded was, were, had etc.)
  • Simplify tenses.
  • Spill your parenthetical (wait, we can't have thoughts in parenthesis?)
  • Avoid alliteration.
  • Rethink abstraction.
  • Use figurative language sparingly.
  • Engage all senses.
  • Cut the last sentence.

OVERALL EDITING
1. Does this character appear all the way through the book, or disappear with an explanation? (Death, travel, etc.) If not, does this character have a place in this book?
2. Does this character still look and act the way he did at the beginning of the book? 
3. If this scene introduces a new idea or new action, is it something that I remembered to follow through all the way to the end? 
4. Have you met the objectives of your story? 
5. Have you followed your header, chapter, and quote scheme consistently?
7. Does this scene matter? 

The Editor's Blog & Query Shark

(post contributed by Brooke Hargett)

Since I'm in the middle of editing my book, I've been focusing on things that will help me, to that end.   I've found a lot of really helpful information on The Editor's Blog and I thought I would share!


One question we've had come up in our writing group is when to use or omit italics for our character's thoughts.  I found all the answers in this post: Inner Dialogue- Writing Character Thoughts 


One thing I learned from reading her post about how to structure a Synopsis is that no matter what point of view your book is in, the synopsis should be written in third person present tense. 


In Stir Reader Curiosity she addresses the importance of giving the reader something they aren't expecting.   Here are some ways she suggests to do this: 



Encourage readers to anticipate what could happen, but give them an event or character response they couldn’t have expected, yet one so very appropriate for the story—this means you get to not only lead them, but mislead them
Create anticipation by writing a character action that requires another character’s reaction
Give characters multiple problems and setbacks—pile on the problems
Encourage readers to think—keep them involved
Raise the stakes
Give characters a reason to move faster—set a clock ticking
Introduce a new character, one who shakes up the status quo
Remove a character to take away another character’s support system
Change any major story element—don’t allow either characters or readers to grow comfortable.

I've also been reviewing a lot of the posts from Query Shark to try to flush out my query.  The query shark is brutal and honest, but its very helpful if you're not the one on the hook. :)  Its free to send in your query, and if you get picked and "chewed up" you have the chance to revise and try again.  It is very helpful to look through these!  GOOD LUCK!
Hope these tips were helpful!  See ya next time!
Brooke